Mosaic Freeschool

  • Home
  • Classes
    • Classes '22-'23
    • Past Classes
  • Facilitators
    • Mosaic Facilitators
    • Educator Network
  • Enroll
    • Admissions
    • Registration
    • Payment
  • Contact
  • Opportunities
  • Home
  • Classes
    • Classes '22-'23
    • Past Classes
  • Facilitators
    • Mosaic Facilitators
    • Educator Network
  • Enroll
    • Admissions
    • Registration
    • Payment
  • Contact
  • Opportunities

Mosaic Minutes

BeTWEEN the Lines Class Summary 4/7/14

4/7/2014

 
with Michelle Cameron

Online Journal Submissions

Picture
It’s hard to believe, but I’m almost done working with your kids. My last day will be May 5.

Before our last day, we will put together an online journal. The journal will include only your child’s first name and age, so there are no worries about identifying them. But you will certainly be able to share the link to your child’s stories and poems with family and friends.

We discussed today which story the writers are going to submit. This is what they came up with:

·       E – Crabzilla and (perhaps) Splatter

·       V – Sophie’s Adventures and a poem

·       OC – Pencil story and a poem

·       B – Zoo story and a poem

·       S – Clara

·       OO – Candle story

·       N – not certain yet

·       A – Heaven & Hell story

·       C – Pompeii

The children may change their minds – but only until  this Friday, when I would ask that everyone submit me their stories via email: mcameron@writerscircleworkshops.com. This will give me a chance to review their stories or poems and make some suggestions.

So their homework this week is ONLY to finish, edit, and revise their submission so that it is as perfect as they can make it. It’s perfectly okay to have you look it over and help them through the revision process.

Next Monday I’ll sit down with each one and review my suggestions. Then they’ll have a week to make those edits and re-submit.

Today's Story Critiques

  Among the comments we made:

·       Make sure you spend enough time at the beginning of a story so that we root for the main character.

·       If a character is doing something dangerous, make sure they hesitate before doing it.

·       It’s great when you can give your reader enough clues to lead your reader – and even better when your clues make your readers doubt their conclusions.

·       Fables and allegories are lovely ways to tell a story.

·       Try to avoid using sentence tags, especially with adverbs – try and show how the character feels by explaining what their face looks like or their body is doing.

National Poetry Month

Picture
Because it is National Poetry Month, I shared a famous poem by William Wordsworth, “Daffodils.”

Before we began, we talked about the line “A poet cannot help but be gay,” and of course they knew that Wordsworth did not have the contemporary meaning in mind. By discussing it first, I deflated any tittering when we got to that line.

I then read the poem and the children circled words they didn’t know. We discussed the poem’s meaning and then defined the new vocabulary.

Then we “exploded” the poem. First the children read it in a round-robin, each one taking 2-3 lines. Then I asked them to find lines that “spoke” to them, and we went around the circle three times, just voicing those lines. And – as they already knew I’d do – I asked them to write a poem or story that was inspired by one of the lines.

Many of them chose to write poems, which did my heart good. As we talked through the poems, some of the issues that surfaced included:

·       The fact that poetry is compressed language, which means unnecessary words should be eliminated. This includes “prosy” words and full sentences.

·       That a slightly obscure poem can be clarified by the use of a great title.

·       That more description helps ground us in the poem (or story).

Homework

See above. Please do make sure the kids email me their submissions by Friday afternoon!

Comments are closed.

    RSS Feed

    Categories

    All
    Afternoon Enrichment
    Closures
    Clubs
    Early Elementary
    Mosaic Texas
    Odyssey Of The Mind
    Out Of This World
    Philosophy
    Tesserae Fall 2012
    Tesserae Fall 2013
    Tesserae Fall 2014
    Tesserae Spring 2013
    Tesserae Spring 2014
    Tesserae Spring 2015
    Tesserae Spring 2016

    Archives

    May 2016
    April 2016
    March 2016
    February 2016
    June 2015
    May 2015
    April 2015
    March 2015
    February 2015
    January 2015
    December 2014
    November 2014
    October 2014
    September 2014
    July 2014
    June 2014
    May 2014
    April 2014
    March 2014
    February 2014
    January 2014
    December 2013
    November 2013
    October 2013
    September 2013
    July 2013
    May 2013
    April 2013
    March 2013
    February 2013
    January 2013
    December 2012
    November 2012
    October 2012
    September 2012
    August 2012

Powered by Create your own unique website with customizable templates.
Photos used under Creative Commons from nojhan, Clay Gilliland, mynameisharsha, kim siciliano salem, matthewvenn, photogirl7.1, El Bibliomata, ~Brenda-Starr~, Anne Worner, Heather Bickle, NASA Goddard Photo and Video, Black.Dots., marta.b, Felipe Venâncio, A. Galassi, bibliojojo, Bibliothèque - Les Champs Libres - Rennes, Robert Hensley, opensourceway, Greenland Travel, est1996x, John-Morgan, camnjeanacess, plindberg, chrisjtse, Vox Efx, philosophygeek, utpala ॐ, Cea., Phil Roeder, andreazgarcia, stevecadman, laynasaur, Steve A Johnson, mattk1979, Tattooed Hippy, spacepleb, Mateus Hidalgo, Todd Binger, TRF_Mr_Hyde, ComputerHotline, Hampshire and Solent Museums, Ben Sutherland, philip_sheldrake, WeeLittlePiggy, echiner1, gruntzooki, emmeffe6, saoire, symphony of love, ups2006, Dave_B_, bobsfever, Kelly Short6, RichardBH, frau-Vogel, Skype Nomad, giopuo, Tomi Tapio