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BeTWEEN the Lines Class Summary 3/10/14

3/11/2014

 
with Michelle Cameron

Critique of Stories

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Despite taking a break in the middle to write, we managed to get through everyone’s story today. I did give the kids a choice of giving me their print outs if they wanted a more in-depth critique. From here on out, I’ll always include that as a possibility – and definitely take home those stories we don’t get to share.

Here are some of the things we discussed today as we critiqued the work that they brought in from home:

1.   One of the aspects of creating a character’s voice is that the character may use phrases that otherwise might be edited out – such as “like.” 

2.   Exaggeration can help create a strong voice – if it’s in keeping with the character.

3.   That one of the (few) hard and fast rules of writing is that we need to know who is speaking at all times.

4.   We spent awhile talking about the role of prologues, particularly because two students used them this time to start off their stories. Among the aspects we discussed: 
  • Their main role is to intrigue the reader. This is why sometimes they are highly mysterious, with a lot of unanswered questions.
  • Sometimes they actually tell the end of the story. When they do, the writer’s job is to make readers forget what they’ve already read.
  • They should be relatively short – maybe a couple of pages at most.
  • They can include action, but often they are simply meant to bring us into the world the author is creating.
  • That – fun fact – some e-readers skip them entirely. So do many readers. So you can’t include anything in them that the reader MUST know.

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5.   Fairy tales told from another perspective can be fascinating – a retelling of stories we already know. (We may incorporate this into a prompt in a later class.)

6.   Use of vocabulary can be a strong factor in setting a scene, particularly if it is a time and place not of our world. 

7.   Any characters who are introduced must serve the story – there should be no “throw-away” characters.

8.   Humor should not just amuse the writer – they have to make sure it’s not a distraction to the story.

9.   If there is something in a story that is unexplained, often the writer needs to make sure to acknowledge this so the reader isn’t left wondering.

10.   We have to believe the facts of a story – someone with a broken leg, for instance, would be in a lot of pain and wouldn’t be able to stand up.

Using Music as a Prompt

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Today I challenged the writers to try and quiet their inner critic. We discussed how sometimes we get stuck writing a story when we’re frightened we won’t do it well. Our inner critic gets in the way of the creative process.

So we tried an experiment. I played a piece of music (“Less Is Moi” by Yo Yo Ma’s Goat Rodeo) and told the kids to write without stopping. They shouldn’t think, shouldn’t go back to correct anything. It would be okay if the thoughts strung together were random and nonsensical. I said that what we’re trying for is “spit on the page” – a first draft that may (or may not) uncover a story hiding within.

It took some time for a few of the kids to get going. But what they wrote was evocative and full of imagery. We didn’t critique these pieces, as it was too preliminary to do so. But we did talk about some of the possibilities inherent in them.

Homework

As always, this week’s homework is a choice:
  • Find the story hiding within the first draft of your music prompt and write it.
  • Continue with the story begun during an earlier class (adding at least 1-2 pages to that story)
  • Start a new story

See everyone next week!

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