Revision & Homework
with Michelle Cameron
This was our last week of revising each other’s work. We discussed what it means to be critical – not mean or nasty, but constructive. I think they have learned to be more insightful when it comes to what works and doesn’t in a work. They themselves noted that each other’s work is improving, which is an excellent sign.
These were all pieces they plan to submit. This week’s homework is to revise everything they plan to submit to the online journal and to email it to me (or to send me a Google Docs link) by 12/16. I’ll review everything and we’ll talk about final changes when we’re back after the break.
Here is what everyone is planning on submitting:
I also mentioned that the students should start thinking about what they want to read on the last day of class. We’ll be doing some practice after the break.
Music: Frozen River Flows & Drop a Red Wagon
We wrote to a piece of music today – an instrumental piece called Frozen River Flows. I found it interesting that some of the kids found it difficult to get started, while others wrote some evocative (and some depressing) pieces.
Because of the difficulty in just letting go and writing, I did an exercise in loosening the creative muscles called “Drop a Red Wagon.” It’s one of my favorites, where everyone is supposed to start off with the same sentence ― “The ice crunched under his feet” ― and then not lift the pencil or pen, no matter what they write. As they do, I tell them to drop certain objects into their writing. This time it was:
While the main objective is to write without judging the work, some of the kids were able to make sense out of these random phrases. The results were comic, of course.